Tuesday, June 11, 2013

Upcoming Conferences and Book Signings

Well, I'm knuckle-deep in drafting Bart's story, so today I just want to tell you about two upcoming events that I will be presenting and signing books at.

Utah Valley Writers Lecture Series

This is a two day conference, open to the public.  It's $50 for both days and that includes lunch.  It's being held in American Fork Utah, and has some really great speakers (besides me).  You can find more details on classes being offered and keynotes, as well as registration information here

I'm also appearing at a free fun family night event on July 1st (Canada Day, woohoo!) with fellow author Jordan McCollum



Here are the details:

The Great White North Comes To Pleasant Grove
July 1st
7:00 - 9:00 p.m.
Pleasant Grove Library

Come Celebrate Canada Day with Your Family at the Pleasant Grove Library!

There will be:

  • door prizes and drawings
  • displays on fun facts of Canada
  • coloring pages
  • tasting tables of Canadian treats
  • storytime about Canada
  • and much more . . .


It's the perfect family night to learn about our Canadian neighbors.

Canadian author Julie Coulter Bellon will also be signing her books at the event along with Jordan McCollum, whose CIA titles are set in Canada.  Their books will be available for purchase that evening.

I hope you can come to one or both of these events.  I think it will be a blast.  Come introduce yourself to me if you do come.  I'd love to meet you!

Monday, June 10, 2013

Triple Whammy---Three Book Reviews!

I got my own review today by Lindzee Armstrong that's had me smiling all morning long.  Go here to read what she said about Ashes Ashes.

So, I had a weekend of reading and it was wonderful and relaxing.  I hope you got some in, too.



The first book I want to tell you about today, is True by Erin McCarthy.  It's a New Adult novel about a tall nerdy girl named Rory who just doesn't seem to fit in.  She has two hot college roommates who take her along to parties and such, but Rory is just socially awkward.  While she is waiting on the couch for her roommates, there's an incident with a guy trying to force Rory to do something she doesn't want to do and Tyler Mann, a sexy bad boy steps in to protect her.  The story goes from there about how these two very different people find love with each other even though there are some pretty big odds stacked against them.

I liked the characters a lot.  The author writes three dimensional characters so well that it's easy to come to love them all, even the secondary cast.  Tyler's brothers stole the show in some places.  I liked the idea of Tyler trying to do what's best all the time, even when it was hurtful and hard, and that underneath his outer layer of tattoos and attitude was a really caring person who saw Rory for what she really was inside.  I had a hard time with all the swearing, and graphic sex scenes, however.  It really took away from the story for me because I think the writer didn't need it to get anything across. Not my cup of tea I guess.  But the characters were compelling and the story was good.

Here's the back copy:

When Rory Macintosh’s roommates find out that their studious and shy friend has never been with a guy, they decide that, as an act of kindness they’ll help her lose her virginity by hiring confident, tattooed bad boy Tyler Mann to do the job…unbeknownst to Rory.

Tyler knows he’s not good enough for Rory. She’s smart, doctor smart, while he’s barely scraping by at his EMT program, hoping to pull his younger brothers out of the hell their druggy mother has left them in. But he can’t resist taking up her roommates on an opportunity to get to know her better. There’s something about her honesty that keeps him coming back when he knows he shouldn’t…

Torn between common sense and desire, the two find themselves caught up in a passionate relationship. But when Tyler’s broken family threatens to destroy his future, and hers, Rory will need to decide whether to cut her ties to his risky world or follow her heart, no matter what the cost…


Home to Whiskey Creek

The second book I read is the fourth in Brenda Novak's Whiskey Creek series.  I did a book signing with Brenda once so I read her books occasionally.  This one reminded me a bit of her book Dead Silence when a successful woman comes home to her small town to face her demons and solve a mystery.  But Home to Whiskey Creek has Adelaide Davies in the lead role.

Adelaide comes home to Whiskey Creek to help her grandmother, and during her first few days there she's kidnapped and thrown down an old mine shaft---the exact place the event happened that changed her life and forced her to run away.  Thankfully, Noah Rackham is riding his bike near the mine that night and hears her cries for help.  He's stunned to hear anyone in the area, since the mine was closed off after his twin brother's death on graduation night, but he goes to help her. He's even more surprised and intrigued when she doesn't want anything to do with him.

Home to Whiskey Creek is a romantic mystery that had me turning pages to see if they would find out who was threatening Adelaide and when she would tell him what really happened that night.  Great suspense.  I loved the characters and how broken and flawed they were and the townspeople are realistic as well.  I felt like the end was a bit rushed and I wanted more out of the epilogue since there were a few storyline threads still dangling.  There was also a few fairly graphic sex scenes and some swearing.  Overall, though, these were easy to skip and I thought the story was well done.  Ms. Novak is a master at characterization and sympathetic characters.

Here's the back copy:

Sometimes home is the refuge you need — and sometimes it isn’t.

Adelaide Davies, who’s been living in Sacramento, returns to Whiskey Creek, the place she once called home. She’s there to take care of her aging grandmother and to help with Gran’s restaurant, Just Like Mom’s. But Adelaide’s not happy to be back. There are too many people here she’d rather avoid, people who were involved in that terrible June night fifteen years ago.

Ever since the graduation party that changed her life, she’s wanted to go to the police and make sure the boys responsible — men now — are punished. But she can’t, not without revealing an even darker secret.

So it’s better to pretend. . .


Noah Rackham, popular, attractive, successful, is shocked when Adelaide won’t have anything to do with him. He has no idea that his very presence reminds her of something she’d rather forget. Neither does he know she’s the reason his twin brother didn’t survive that party at the old mine.



A Timeless Romance Anthology---Summer Wedding Collection

This was an anthology that I loved.  There were some of my favorite authors with sweet, clean romances that I heartily recommend to anyone who loves the first butterflies of love.  Each story had great characters with chemistry and I finished reading with a smile on my face, although there were a couple that I wished went on longer, just because the characters were so great.  There was also one that was very poorly edited with words missing and tenses wrong, which made it feel out of place to me since the others were so well done, but if you can overlook that, it was an anthology that belongs on my rainy day shelf to read again.  I thought I would put which one was my favorite, but honestly, I can't choose.  There really were some great bite-sized romantic stories that made me sigh like a schoolgirl.

Here's the back copy:

Six Award-Winning Authors have contributed new stories to A Timeless Romance Anthology: Summer Wedding Collection. Readers will love this collection of six sweet contemporary romance novellas, centered on a Summer Wedding, all with one thing in common: Romance.

In Melanie Jacobson’s charming novella, Love Bytes, Bree is the maid-of-honor and Dallen is the best-man. Living across the country from each other, they commiserate over their prospective best friends’ unrealistic wedding demands. While they plan and plot over email and texting, Bree realizes that the best part about the Maui wedding might be meeting Dallen. She just hopes that he’ll feel the same way.

Romeo and Julie-ex is a sweet romance by Julie Wright. “Romeo” turns out to be a two-timing jerk, and when Juliet Moore’s pre-ordered wedding dress arrives from UPS, Juliet curses everything male. In a stubborn streak, she decides to keep the bridal photography appointment—if only because the money isn’t refundable and it was the one thing that her ex-fiance actually paid for. Plus, she has the perfect wedding dress. When Juliet shows up for the appointment and meets photographer Jack Montague, she might have to take back some of her curses on men.

In Rachael Anderson’s enchanting novella, The Meltdown Match, Courtney spends each summer in her hometown of Heimel, Alaska, to find inspiration for her next novel. Her writing method has become a pattern—outline a novel in Heimel, then move to the place her novel is set to finish writing it. But when she runs into former high school friend, Mitch Winters, and they both win the Meltdown Match—a traditional dating contest—Courtney discovers that leaving her hometown at the end of the summer might not be so easy this time.

In Golden Sunrise, an engaging romance by Annette Lyon, Natalie takes time out of her crazy schedule to fly to Vegas for her best friend’s wedding. Sierra and Jason, high-school sweethearts, are finally getting married. Fortunately for Natalie, her old high-school flame, Adam, has a work commitment and can’t be there as best man. But when she arrives at the wedding rehearsal—late and ragged—Adam is there. Memories from the past—and all her old feelings—come flooding back. When Adam makes a wild suggestion, Natalie just may take him up on it, even though she knows he’s moved on. A single choice may mean Natalie is taking a shot at reclaiming the past—or that she's putting her heart in harm’s way a second time.

Tide Pools is a captivating story by Heather B. Moore. When Lexi makes a quick trip to Hawaii to attend her friend’s wedding, she discovers that the engaged couple, Sydney and Apelu, are still trying to match-make for her. Lexi laughs because not only does their friend David have a serious girlfriend, but he owns a restaurant on the island. Lexi has too many plans that don’t include a long-distance relationship or coming between a guy and his girlfriend. But when Lexi meets David, she has a hard time remembering why all of her plans were so important.

In Sarah M. Eden’s delightful novella, A Regular Bloke from Stanmore, Abby is helping her sister, Caroline, plan her British wedding. That’s right, Caroline is obsessed with all things British and insists on an authentic wedding in . . . Oregon. When they arrive at Sainsbury House reception hall, it has everything Caroline loves, and the host, Matthew Carlton, even has a British accent. Yet Abby isn’t buying the whole good-looking-British man with impeccable manners thing; she’s determined to expose him as a fake. But the more Abby gets to know Matthew, the more she realizes how wrong she really is.

Friday, June 7, 2013

First Page Friday

So excited it's Friday.  I'm hoping for a long relaxing weekend with my new novel.  I'm glad Ms. Shreditor talked about dialogue today since that's something I'm working on in Bart's story.

As always, if you would like your first page critiqued please follow the guidelines in the sidebar.  Thank you to Kara and Ms. Shreditor for their time and effort.

See you next week!



The Entry
A Gate Called Beautiful
by Kara McKenzie

Claudia pushed a tangled mass of dark hair behind her shoulders, eyes fixed on the road leading to Capernaum, the small fishing town on the Sea of Galilee miles north of Jerusalem. Leaning against a large boulder in a rock-strewn area, she gripped her cup tighter, while people walked past toward the synagogue for afternoon prayer. Her voice rang out from sunken cheeks.

“Alms! For the poor! Alms! For the poor!” she cried. When she received no response, she smiled at the people on the clay-packed trail, a yearning in her eyes.

Her smile drew wider despite the hot, muggy day. Could one of them look this way? An ache struck deep within her eager for a smile, or to hear a soft-spoken word. She touched the twisted foot that made her unclean and smoothed out the folds in her wrinkled tunic and frowned.

Hearing a familiar voice from behind, she smiled and spun around expectantly. Baruch? She thought it was her friend by the sound of his voice, his enlarged chest making it difficult for him to breathe.

“How much in coins this day, Claudia?”

The beat of camels hoofs clomping along the road, sheep bleating on their way to the temple for sacrifice and the soft jingle of coins dropping into beggar’s cups half-drowned out his voice. “Not many, Baruch. And yet I’m hoping Adonai, the Lord, will provide. Although I wasn’t expecting much, after fifteen years of living on the streets and knowing how it is. They seem to take little notice of us.”

She averted her eyes from Baruch’s misshapen body covered in muddy, ragged clothes and a frown drew across her brow when she noticed the cloth tied to his feet with a piece of rope for sandals.

Ms. Shreditor's Comments

This sample’s greatest strength is its descriptiveness. The author taps into multiple senses to craft a vivid opening scene. There are hooves clomping, coins jingling, and masses of dark hair. However, I think that the first paragraph could be stronger. The first sentence is a jumble of details; in one breath, we’re meeting Claudia and getting a quick geography lesson about the area. The most compelling detail we get in the first paragraph is Claudia’s sunken cheeks. I’d suggest moving this character-defining detail to the beginning, as it will pique reader curiosity right off the bat.

While we’re on the subject of the first paragraph, I want to point out how important it is that descriptions be to scale. The first sentence indicates that Capernaum is “miles north” of Jerusalem. This doesn’t accurately depict the distance between the two—Capernaum is roughly 120 miles north of Jerusalem, which would have made for a very long journey back when this story takes place. As I’ve mentioned in past columns, you never want to leave your reader with the impression that you’re unfamiliar with the location of your story, so make sure to fact-check even the smallest geographical details.

Another detail in the story confused me. The fourth paragraph says, “She thought it was her friend by the sound of his voice, his enlarged chest making it difficult for him to breathe.” Why is Baruch’s chest enlarged? Why exactly is he having trouble breathing? This isn’t immediately apparent, so consider revising for clarity. Similarly, the “ache” in the third paragraph needs to be tweaked. As the sentence currently reads, the ache feels eager for a smile, which isn’t possible. You might say, Eager for a smile or a soft-spoken word, she felt an ache deep inside.

A note about dialogue: Sometimes, knowing when to cut off dialogue can mean the difference between speech that sounds realistic and speech that sounds like a veiled information dump. In the sixth paragraph, Claudia talks to Baruch about how she wasn’t expecting much from the passersby after fifteen years of living on the streets. If the narrative is any indication, Baruch is a close friend she sees on a regular basis. So the last two sentences feel a bit superfluous here. You might try recasting like this: “Not many, Baruch. And yet I’m hoping Adonai, the Lord, will provide, although I wasn’t expecting much.” Claudia had lived on the street for fifteen years and knew how it was. Passersby rarely noticed her and Baruch. This tweaked version conveys the same information as the original without bogging down the dialogue with background information that close friends wouldn’t bring up in passing conversation.


There are some compelling elements on this first page. Claudia appears to be the classic underdog heroine, the kind of character that will always resonate with readers. I’m not certain where this story is headed, so I think it’s important to lay down a strong hook in the first paragraph. Readers don’t have to know exactly where they’re going on the first page, but it helps if they’re emotionally invested in the person who’s going to lead them there.

Thursday, June 6, 2013

To Bookmark or Not To Bookmark

I am in a quandary and need your opinion.  So many of my author friends order bookmarks to give out at signings and such, but I haven't.  My publisher gave me bookmarks when I first published and whenever I did signings I handed them out.  But now that I'm independently published, I'm wondering if it's worth the expense.  I mean, I occasionally do booksignings, I speak at conferences and such, but do I really need bookmarks for people to remember me by?

For me, when I receive bookmarks from people I set them in a drawer at home and use them when I'm in a bind, but I have a Kindle so I don't use them a whole lot and I generally don't look at them for info.  So here's what I want to know:

Do you actually look at and potentially purchase books from info on a bookmark?  Do you think bookmarks are worth the money with all the ereaders nowadays?

Wednesday, June 5, 2013

Word Count Wednesday & Character Inspiration Photos

I just have to tell you, my first author interview for Ashes Ashes was posted today.  You can read all about my inspiration for the book here.

Well, I had a bit of inspiration and motivation this week.  I found a picture of the man who closely resembles (in my mind) Bart, my main character in my new book.  Here he is:

(No infringement is intended by posting these photos, this is just my wish list if my book were ever made into a movie.)




His name is Eduardo Verastegui.  He was raised in a little village in Northern Mexico and is the son of a sugar cane farmer. He can sing and he can act.  And he would be my perfect Bart in my new novel Pocket Full of Posies.  What do you think?

As for word count, I'm finishing up the first chapter and boy, this one has been intense to write.  So far, though, I still love Bart, Colby, Claire and the Captain, so we're good.  I've written about 5000 words on this manuscript so far.

How did you do this week?

And do you ever look at pictures of people that inspire your imagination for your characters?  Why or why not?

Tuesday, June 4, 2013

Three Wonderful Things

Today I'm having a little celebration for myself and I think I'm going to break out my good chocolate.  Three wonderful things have happened to me and I'm excited to share.  So come to the party!



First of all, I was notified yesterday that my book All Fall Down won the reader preference round for suspense/thriller, which means it's now a finalist for the RONE awards.  The winners will be announced in Las Vegas in August.  Yay!

The second thing was that I got a five star review for my new book Ashes Ashes!  Mel's Shelves said, "if you enjoy a fast-paced, clean romantic suspense novel you must read this book!"  To read the whole review of what she thought of my characters and dialogue click here

And the third thing is that I also got a review from A Book A Day who said, "I loved the level of action and suspense, waiting for a man with a gun to jump out at any moment. You won't regret reading this book!"  You can read the whole review here

*throws confetti*  So there you have it, my three reasons to celebrate.

Anything good happening in your life lately?

Monday, June 3, 2013

I, Spy Blog Tour Answers My Spy Question



I am participating in the blog tour of I, Spy, and Mr. Nice Spy by Jordan McCollum.  I am so excited about these books.  If you want a fun and sassy heroine who's juggling her spy life with real life, then this is the series for you.  I love the voice of the main character Talia in I, Spy, because she feels so real and yet someone that I could be friends with.  You all know how I loved the TV series, Alias, and this reminds me a bit of that.  It's also set in Canada and since I'm Canadian, well, it's like two perfect worlds have collided for me.

Her partner, Elliott, is also trying to juggle real life with his spy life and I was pleasantly surprised to find out what makes him tick and how his partnership with Talia figures into his life in the prequel novella, Mr. Nice Spy.  (I read the book, I Spy, first.)  Ms. McCollum has created a cast of characters that are memorable and make me anxious to see the series continue just so I can find out what happens to them!

And, on the spur of the moment side, I submitted a question for a spy tip and it was, "How can a mom enjoy candy without her kids noticing and wanting her to share?" which spy novelist, Jordan McCollum answered below in the video.  So fun!

Point of this story?  If you're looking for the perfect summer read, then this is it.  I loved these books and highly recommend them to anyone.  You can read more about the blog tour and launch, get a cool spy tip for your daily life and download a free copy below!  (For the launch, you can also find Mr. Nice Spy on Amazon, Kobo, and JordanMcCollum.com!)


About the Book

Canada is probably the last place you'd expect to find an American spy. CIA operative Elliott Monteith has made it work, just like he's made things work with his longtime fiancée Shanna. Until Shanna lays out an ultimatum: move forward or move on. Meanwhile, Elliott and his best friend and fellow operative, Talia Reynolds, try to track an elusive leak at the American embassy. But something changes between Elliott and Talia as they close in on the man selling out his country. Professional and personal lines blur and Elliott has to choose—his fiancée or his best friend. More about Mr. Nice Spy | Add Mr. Nice Spy to your Goodreads to-read list!



I, Spy

Mr. Nice Spy is a prequel to the novel I, Spy, available now. To save her country and her secrets, CIA operative Talia Reynolds will have to sacrifice the man she loves. More about I, Spy.


About the author

An award-winning author, Jordan McCollum can’t resist a story where good defeats evil and true love conquers all. In her day job, she coerces people to do things they don’t want to, elicits information and generally manipulates the people she loves most—she’s a mom. Jordan holds a degree in American Studies and Linguistics from Brigham Young University. When she catches a spare minute, her hobbies include reading, knitting and music. She lives with her husband and four children in Utah.


Hone your spy skills

Want to enjoy candy without having to give it all to your kids? Find out how to use spy skills to get away with it! Further hone your spy skills by reading Mr. Nice Spy!


The clue!

As part of the debut of Mr. Nice Spy, Jordan is hosting a contest to figure out the "theme" song for the story. Collect clues at each blog stop and use your spy skills to piece together the clues to win a $25 Amazon gift card!! Click here to enter.

The clue for this stop is:

The single-word name of the Mr. Nice Spy song appears in Chapter 2 of the novella.

The freebie!

Thanks for participating in this launch tour! As a free gift this week, Jordan is giving out free copies of Mr. Nice Spy! Simply to go http://JordanMcCollum.com/store/. You can also get 40% off I, Spy!