tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4421706587311875668.post7651520782554971975..comments2023-10-14T06:54:41.793-06:00Comments on Julie Coulter Bellon: First Page FridayJulie Coulter Bellonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07695605817809301518noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4421706587311875668.post-83342933613009698722012-11-30T13:39:02.533-07:002012-11-30T13:39:02.533-07:00Thanks for sharing--both the writer and the editor...Thanks for sharing--both the writer and the editors. Ronda Gibb Hinrichsenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03504581218342122865noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4421706587311875668.post-8135680847082418122012-11-30T13:38:53.309-07:002012-11-30T13:38:53.309-07:00I struggle with the idea of a dodgeball-aged-kid m...I struggle with the idea of a dodgeball-aged-kid mentally using terms like "scolded myself" and "smugly". They're correct, of course, and from an adult perspective they fit perfectly, but would a ten year old use words like that inside her own mind? MG voice is hard to nail, and this is part of why. Ginahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02739830983426330836noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4421706587311875668.post-73477245589744342002012-11-30T13:36:56.189-07:002012-11-30T13:36:56.189-07:00Well done for being brave enough to do this, Chas....Well done for being brave enough to do this, Chas. Love the observations, too.Donna K. Weaverhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15763832177263927311noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4421706587311875668.post-35118170240150651942012-11-30T13:27:55.732-07:002012-11-30T13:27:55.732-07:00Eeek! I read like a middle grader! I glossed over ...Eeek! I read like a middle grader! I glossed over Lindsey's last name! And worse yet, I chew on pencils, too. Of course, they're drawing pencils and they do have magical powers of creation. I was the girls' dodge ball champion of my grade school, just so you know. <br /><br />What a wickedly awesome critique, Angela and Heidi. Chas is a great sport for letting us see his first page. Debra Erferthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08239033133090036826noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4421706587311875668.post-54280352885611893872012-11-30T13:17:18.786-07:002012-11-30T13:17:18.786-07:00Thanks, Julie! What a great critique! I'm exci...Thanks, Julie! What a great critique! I'm excited to play around with the chapter some more, there are some great suggestions here. <br /><br />Thanks again!Chas Hathawayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08333078321266436364noreply@blogger.com