tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4421706587311875668.post2736284808104313716..comments2023-10-14T06:54:41.793-06:00Comments on Julie Coulter Bellon: First Page FridayJulie Coulter Bellonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07695605817809301518noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4421706587311875668.post-35832402468057091022012-11-04T22:03:28.123-07:002012-11-04T22:03:28.123-07:00Oh, I really like seeing that I didn't finish ...Oh, I really like seeing that I didn't finish at least one sentence/paragraph in there. But the thoughts are already in another section, at least. The irony!<br /><br />Glad to help, Julie and Karen! And great questions, John. I assume this kid isn't wearing skinny jeans ;) .Jordan McCollumhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16523599384793856702noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4421706587311875668.post-59341885901010295472012-11-02T16:38:34.091-06:002012-11-02T16:38:34.091-06:00Does the van have the words "Free Candy"...Does the van have the words "Free Candy" scrawled on it? ;)<br /><br />I agree with Jordan about the voice. It's very entertaining, and as much as I'm squirming thinking of it, I really liked the phrase "nut-numbing cold." Now that's cold!<br /><br />What DOES the kid say? =)<br /><br />What does the narrator do, P.I.?<br /><br />(It's been a while since I was a teenager. Could one reasonably fit his hands deep into his jeans pockets?)Jon Spellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13283068961865370674noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4421706587311875668.post-51163203568831078532012-11-02T16:34:37.535-06:002012-11-02T16:34:37.535-06:00For some reason Karen's comments aren't go...For some reason Karen's comments aren't going through, so I promised her I would post it for her.<br /><br />"I want to thank you, Jordan, for stepping in and providing me with such a thoughtful, insightful critique. I appreciate your kind words, too. And I thank you, Julie, for so generously extending an opportunity for writers to receive feedback from people who really know their stuff."<br /><br />Thanks, Karen!Julie Coulter Bellonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07695605817809301518noreply@blogger.com