tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4421706587311875668.post2226724258214166150..comments2023-10-14T06:54:41.793-06:00Comments on Julie Coulter Bellon: First Page FridayJulie Coulter Bellonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07695605817809301518noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4421706587311875668.post-66705951769536075512011-07-01T14:24:16.393-06:002011-07-01T14:24:16.393-06:00Charlie, you are making me hungry! And of course,...Charlie, you are making me hungry! And of course, anyone is allowed to re-submit. Thanks for bringing that up. :)Julie Coulter Bellonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07695605817809301518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4421706587311875668.post-29663836274981538002011-07-01T13:52:01.915-06:002011-07-01T13:52:01.915-06:00Interestingly, my first thought was this sure is a...Interestingly, my first thought was this sure is a long first page. My comment would be for this writer to take these comments and suggestions to build a new first page and resubmit it. I am sure Julie wouldn't mind that. Or Ms. Shreditor, either.<br /><br />Julie, my grandparents (maternal) are buried in B.C. I loved those Revello (probably spelled wrong) ice cream bars. They were popular in B.C. anyway. And those chewy caramel candy bars.Charlie Moorehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15383217084337552494noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4421706587311875668.post-24190744911186034582011-07-01T13:42:09.595-06:002011-07-01T13:42:09.595-06:00Thanks for the Canada Day wishes Deb and Jennie!
...Thanks for the Canada Day wishes Deb and Jennie!<br /><br />Jon, I love an Australian or English accent. *sigh* And you are right, the lead actress on Castle, Stana Katic, as well as the lead, Nathan Fillion, are both Canadian. Did you hear the latest Castle spoilers? I CANNOT WAIT for the season opener. The first few minutes sound amazing!!Julie Coulter Bellonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07695605817809301518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4421706587311875668.post-33794156820861351192011-07-01T13:25:17.047-06:002011-07-01T13:25:17.047-06:00I have to confess - the British accent would do it...I have to confess - the British accent would do it for me, too. Or Australian, French, Spanish or even Deep South. Maybe even Canadian, but it takes a while to determine that, eh? Isn't the lead actress from Castle Canadian? Yowza!<br /><br />I'm going to guess "ducking my head" instead of "sucking my head". ;)<br /><br />Debra, I'm going to agree with you. Her reaction before he speaks should be one of outrage, but then maybe it melts when she hears his accent?<br /><br />In related news, I submitted my whole first chapter to the most grueling editor on the planet - my wife - and, boy, did she, um, give me some stuff to work on. Oof! I'm thinking maybe wait until the 2nd draft to show her the rest. =)Jon Spellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13283068961865370674noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4421706587311875668.post-267405428628103942011-07-01T12:02:51.106-06:002011-07-01T12:02:51.106-06:00Happy Canada to you, Julie!!Happy Canada to you, Julie!!Jenniehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15623353613539928215noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4421706587311875668.post-40085069766088794592011-07-01T11:07:09.456-06:002011-07-01T11:07:09.456-06:00Happy Canada Day to you too, Julie.
Ms. Shredito...Happy Canada Day to you too, Julie. <br /><br />Ms. Shreditor’s gentle critique hit all the high points I would have, with a few exceptions. I don’t like the Brit. I don’t care if he had a cute accent, and if the MC had thoughts of how much she loved this or that while picking herself up out of the mud, then all my desire to read any more just dripped off the bottom of her wet book bag. It was an unnatural reaction. She should’ve been mad and not infatuated with someone who didn’t show any sympathy. More than that, he laughed at her. I would’ve slugged him. <br /><br />Sorry, Anonymous, but thanks for putting your first page out there for us to learn from.Debra Erferthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08239033133090036826noreply@blogger.com